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Post by Lady Elwen on Mar 24, 2005 21:22:41 GMT -5
Author's Name: fael bain Author's Email: fanfic@wengyl.netSubmission Title: Greeleaf Please leave reviews for Greeleaf in this thread. ~ Elwen
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Post by Lady Elwen on Mar 24, 2005 21:28:29 GMT -5
Excellent - a very nice introduction to your writing here.  I adore the way it's told completely bereft of dialogue, and in the present tense, as well. I do think I am correct in guessing that this is from the Queen's POV... and I find that extremely interesting - she's not a character anyone really knows about, other than the fact that she did exist. I like this view of her relationship with Thranduil - the persuasive, gentle convincing. Good notes about immortality and its bad side - it's too often seen as this wonderful thing where you live forever, when I highly doubt that it truly is. Very sweet description about the changes in Thraduil's personality and his reaction to the child - the lack of the utmost detail is a good thing. Nice work with the imagery and flow - a story written in this style often has a lot more glitches in it than yours does, and it isn't an easy method. Your ideas come off strongly, and as said before, it's a good interpretation. ~ Elwen |
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Post by Nurnoviel on Apr 5, 2005 1:57:33 GMT -5
Hey fael bain! I'm pretty sure I've read this one before- probably on Parma- but it's such an amazing fic that I read it all again. I love the language you use and the imagery that you are able to evoke, and it transforms this piece from a simple POV to a compelling read. Like Elwen said, it was a great choice to write this story from the Queen's perspective. Little known characters are often the best mouth pieces for character studies on those more well known figures, like Thranduil. You've also managed to refrain from turning the focus onto her and Mary-Suing his wife. Great narration, beautiful descriptions and an all-round brilliant story. Love it, fael bain. |
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Post by Lady Adara on Aug 3, 2005 23:17:30 GMT -5
A very well written piece, fael bain. I agree with Elwen and Nurnoviel in that taking the viewpoint of a little-known, nearly non-existent character, you are given that much more freedom to interpret another. Your imagery is compelling and while the tense is a bit unusual, you manage to utilise it to the fullest in this story.
The events captured here, the aftermath of the war for Mirkwood, is a little-discussed event, especially in terms of canon, and 'tis interesting to see what the toll is upon the "newly" crowned monarch of Mirkwood. His reaction to the child is so pure and perfect.
I also appreciate the lack of explicit detail you present here. Too many authors seem to feel the need to drop their writing into the midst of R and NC-17, seeming to think that it is necessary to gain attention, but I do not feel it so and your writing is refreshing in that you avoid that entirely and provide your readers with a glimpse of pure, unadultered truth. And as Nurnoviel stated, you avoided the MS quality that an OC, especially a female one, is too often able to acquire without trying.
Excellent work overall!
~ Adara
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Post by fael bain on Oct 10, 2005 15:13:37 GMT -5
Hey everybody, thanks very much for the kind words. I am glad you liked it, and I agree completely that too many stories are thrust into the R and NC-17 range (I might be guilty of that myself sometimes!) when they try to bring out a topic as fundamental to Elves as love.
I'm sorry I haven't been around much, as RL has gone into overdrive, but I'm hoping to be able to post more soon.
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